Welcome to the next installment in our IELTS Writing Part 2 series. Today we have two essays from one of our newest IELTS students Michael. He has very quickly taken on the norms associated with structuring an academic essay which ensures that he has a good task response score, as well as a good coherency score. Whilst there are grammatical issues in terms of prepositions and sentence structure, it is clear from his introduction what Michael's position is and his use of short, concise topic sentences mean that each paragraph is very easily understandable and complimentary to the argument he's putting forward. It is vital that you work on your IELTS essay structuring and adopting the techniques and writing style to make your essay as elegant as possible. Grammar is of course very important, but is only 1 of categories which make up the way your IELTS essay is scored.
Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimise the bad effects?
The enormous growth in the use of the computers over the last twenty years has led to that many people use computers in everyday life and a large number of children spend their time playing in computer games. Although serious problems have arisen as a result of this, there are solutions.
One of the first problems of playing computer games is a negative impact for the physical health of children. For example, there is no doubt that if a child spends a lot of time in front of a computer monitor playing in various games, it would be potentially dangerous for the eyes. Another major problem is that modern computer games affect the thoughts and development of children. These days, there are constant news stories about the contemporary computer games are realistic in showing the scenes of violence, resulting in children becoming no adequate and nervous.
It is important that action is taken to combat these problems. Parents need to closely monitor the activities of their children and limit their time to the computer games, which can now be done through various computer programs. Governments also have a part to play. They should ensure that adequate legislation and controls are in place that will prevent young people from accessing games with the scenes of violence. The game developer companies must also improve their channels of the games distribution to make unauthorized access difficult for children.
To conclude, the computer is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed people’s lives, but not without negative impacts. However, with the right action by individuals, governments and businesses, It can be used safely for children.
These days many people choose to live or work in other countries, which has been made possible because of the convenience of air travel and modern communications.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
These days many people choose to live or work in other countries, which has been made possible because of the convenience of air travel and modern communications. Although it offers a number of advantages in make your life more exciting and interesting, it also has disadvantages. In this essay I intend to show how these benefits outweigh that disadvantage.
Perhaps the major advantage of moving abroad is to change your job or learn something new. Typically, there is a good opportunity to find more interesting job in other countries and focus on those goals that you always wanted to achieve but never had time for. For example, if you move to English-speaking country then this may be a good time to improve your English skills. Other significant advantages are your children will be exposed to different cultures and they will become citizens of the world.
There are, of course, negative aspects to moving abroad. The greatest of these is that you will be away from your friends and relatives but modern communication technologies, such as the Internet and mobile phones, can help you to stay in touch. Another possible problem is unusual habitat for you and your family, you will need to get used to the new living environment.
In summary, I would say that there are more advantages than disadvantages in choosing to live or work in other countries and development of modern technologies are getting such travel easier and easier every year.